1.Let me go! 12. Looking at the scars on my face from you 2.Stop pulling me back! 13.Can only turn my heart blue 3.My heart's bleeding 14.Bursting red gushing blue 4.Please, let me go! 15.I can not believe I loved you 5.My bones are shattered 16.Hear and now in a cloud 6.I am out of my mind 17.Bursting with rain 7.Our love is no longer divine 18. Sweet pierced veins 8.Hold on! 19.Laughter's cold 9.For the pain Swore 20. I lost all I chose 10.You have me now 21.A dark brick road 11.Bound by only a sound 22.For I was sold!
This is a poignant piece, and the feeling that you're conveying within it is quite tangible. The numbering in your style is a technique that I've not seen before, and I appreciate the unique form of pacing that it adds to this poem. You have a gift for expression, and I hope that you will continue to nurture it. The narrative that is apparent within this piece leaves me craving more, and I hope to read more of these poetic words from you. I love writing poetry as well, because it helps me to express the thoughts from my mind in a way that nothing else can. With the availability of this form of cathartic release being so apparent, it can be extremely satisfying. It is so much cooler to be an amazing poet than it is to be a burn out, and for that I am thankful!
Thank you so much for your influential comments! I will definitely continue to post poems to draw an untouched emotion from readers.